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Hello all, I have a favor to ask all of you who are reading this sentence right now. I am currently in nursing school and we had to write a concept paper for our last task of the semester. I failed doing it and my teacher gave me another chance to improve on it, I've attached my final paper. I'm a first semester student by the way. It will be real nice of you to tell me what grade I should get based upon these objectives: (I need a grade of at least 20/30 on this, DID I PASS?) [quote] 1. Write a scholarly paper describing how your initial perception of the nursing profession has changed as you progressed through this course. Specifically discuss the concept(s) that is/are influencing your current view of professional nursing. Include: o a paragraph summarizing your perception of nursing on entering the nursing program o a definition and comprehensive description/discussion of the selected concept(s) o a discussion demonstrating how the selected concept(s) changed your view of nursing citing previous discussion of the concept (including references) o your current view of professional nursing 2. A scholarly paper includes the following: o Title page o Introduction, including a clear thesis statement o Discussion of the topic integrating references to describe and support the ideas/statements/position you are presenting in the paper (see #1 re: content) o Summary and conclusion(s) o Reference Page 3. Length: approximately 8 - 10 pages (typed, double space; excluding title page and reference page). 4. Format: APA Style 5. Final references must meet the minimums described in Part 2, #4. [/quote]
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wow, good luck. I would read it if I could, but I'm in no position to be judging a paper of that level's grade right now lol Hope you did pass though! looks impressive
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Good luck. I know what's like to have to do a paper without someone else to read it for you. I would have helped you, but nursing isn't my forte and neither is english as my first language is french. (So if you see me do first grade grammar error, don't be too harsh with me :D )
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I read the fisrt 2 pages. As I thought, I'm not in the better position to give advise but, you should try to justify your text, so every sentence will have the same length. As for the text itself, maybe you should try to use synonyms for nurse and nursing or use both terms a little bit less. Both these word are in almost every sentence. I understand that it's about the nursing profession, but I feel that they are too much present. Now feel free to do whatever you like with these advises. :D